The best yet! You are great with characterization. This version of Sesshomaru is the perfect blend of impatient abruptness and caring- I liked that he was hurt, in a somewhat minor way, by his break-up with Kagura, and his level of concern for Kagome seemed just right, given the fact that he was already distracted by the break-up, impending visit, and practically running down a woman in the street. The dialogue in this story is right on target too. I immediately felt like I knew these characters, and cared about them as well. There are obviously going to be big complications when Kagome gets to his family's estate and finds out he is InuYasha's half brother! Can't wait to see how that works out for them... Please, please, please, keep working on this story in particular, it is my very favorite!
Oooh la la! Sexy intensity there! ;P
I'm not really into pregnant kagome, unless its from Sesshy, but I think in thsi story it adds a spin of reality. I'm really enjoying this so far and can't wait for more!
Keep it up!
-LavB
love it, just cant wait to see what happens when Kagome finds tinuyaha at the house for the week as well, so please update soon, cant wait to see what happens next.
sara (Chapter 1) - Tue 04 Jan 2011
Nice idea and well written but how is this going to work when she was with Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru wants her to pretend to be with him so that would make her the liar and cheater. It´s going to be hard enough for her so I don´t know how you will make this work without making it a horrible soap opera. Males like Inuyasha here should be castrated and females like Sango exposed like the two-faced sluts they are. I hope you won´t make Kagome a crying ninny the whole time (even if I can understand why she broke down in the car), I´ve always hated it that she is always portrayed as the victim who takes all the shit other characters dish out. I want to see her temper and her not taking any shit from anyone who wronged her.
Woo Sesshomaru the hero :) Although he is a little more talkative than usual I have to admit that I love him nonetheless. Update soon please!
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