Wow!!!  Didn't expect that....  Kagome was lucky she had quick reflexes who would have thought they were housing a demon instead of a Kami in that shrine....  At least she took care of it.

Oooooffff....I'm reeling! I  love where you are going with this story. Please keep going! Love that Kagome didnt beg; I'd love to see Sesshomaru devolve, and the aftermath with the council and perhaps a leap to decades or centuries later?

Well what can you say to stupidity and Sesshomaru has it in spades...  Kagome had every right to leave I wonder where will she go?  To Koga and Ayame or to Miroku and Sango?  Perhaps someone new?

Love this story already....  Can't wait to read more.

Hi there, just a few words to let you know that in this two chapters mi heart just shrink, please continue wiht with this story and hopefully you can complete it. Nice job......!!!!! Up Up...

Hey there, 

You have a great jumping off point, now where do you want to go to finish? 

He knows what he lost and how he lost it, but does he know the why?  What does he do to correct his course or has been pit on a path where he never regains what he lost?  Just a few ideas swirling in my head.  You have a great beginning.  

It has potential. Just needs minor editing tense/POV wise.

Maybe some build-up wouldve been nice but thats really dependent on what you consider important to the story you write. 

Considering the first chapter length word-wise as an introduction and setting the stage, you covered the scene well. Some description of the surroundings (the room) would've been nice to make it more interactive and immersive.  

Its a good first attempt. Do not be discouraged to not continue. The key is to finish something you start with a goal in mind that its going to be under 10 chapters and under 20-30k word wise. Thats doable if you're driven to dabble.  

Good luck !