this is a great story and i have always liked it thank you for updating adn please do it agian soon.

hey great story plz update soon.
Thanks,
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You should consider (like add some) the spacing between each line. It makes it difficult to read on the red screen. I couldn't get past the first page because its too difficult for me to read.

What an interesting plot! My compliments on your scenario.
I look forward to your next installment,