FangedBeasty- Wed 09 Jan 2008
Lovely beginning I can't wait to read more.

:)

-FangedBeasty

Zara- Wed 09 Jan 2008
This is a really great idea, but you really need a beta. Your sentence structure and dialog formatting needs work and it really hurts the story.

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