This is a nice story; well thought out and executed. There is one problem, however. There is a woeful lack of punctuation. This is a good story and the lack it makes the tale harder to read. Remember - commas, periods and even exclation points are your friends.

Seriously, a beta reader would sove this problem. Learning to use it properly is simply a matter of practice.

I look forward to reading more!

Meara

wow...this is awsome!!...please more chapters!!

Toooo cute I hope you update soon this fic is awesome a little confusing at times but still great!

Arry

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

All I can say is your good.Pleas tell me your going to rite the next chapter soon.O and keep up the great work.Eva

Please write more!

I really love your story and can't wait to read more. please wright more I'd like to see how it ends. I also like that you made Kagome a silver fox demon it really suits her. And having Shippo have miko powers very cool.
Keep doing what you'r doing I love it. Can't wait to read more.

I really love your story and can't wait to read more. please wright more I'd like to see how it ends. I also like that you made Kagome a silver fox demon it really suits her. And having Shippo have miko powers very cool.
Keep doing what you'r doing I love it. Can't wait to read more.

I really love your story and can't wait to read more. please wright more I'd like to see how it ends. I also like that you made Kagome a silver fox demon it really suits her. And having Shippo have miko powers very cool.
Keep doing what you'r doing I love it. Can't wait to read more.

ohhh nice chapter!!! update asap

Hey,

I'm not really one to review, so this might lack most of the things an author is looking for - constructive criticism, helpful advice, mindless praise, etc - but I wanted to say that I found the idea behind this little fanfic to be quite interesting and the text, except for a few, minor, grammar and spelling mistakes, fairly well-written. I'm looking forward to seeing how you choose to develop the story.

Good luck and loads of inspiration.
IXthy.