This was very well written, but it was rather confusing in some parts. It would be much more enjoyable to read if we knew what was actually going on in said confusing parts...Anything you could do to remedy that would be great.
| Beautiful. The song of the true addict. It felt like sinful seduction, drawing you in, telling you it's not what you want, but you don't have a choice anyway, because you're going to beg for it....just give it a litle time, and a little push....
I loved the characterisation and the storytelling. It was dark, yeah, just like you warned me, but it was dark temptation. :: God God..I'm quoting the Axe adverts... ::
| O.O -goes to take a cold shower... comes back-
Very steamy, and the imagery was... WOW. I loved how it seems the rain was there to wash away their sins. It's beautifully written. -sighs dreamily- Dewa mata
Akay (Chapter 1) - Mon 06 Oct 2008
| This was interesting. You do have a way with words and I loved your imagery of it all. Comets, ice, and all that stuff. Love how you did that. This is indeed kinda dark and throughout it all, all I can think is 'Why the hell are they in a dark alley next to a dumpster?' I guess the world may never know. I love how you described their struggle/war of feelings and emotions (I believe this is your forte). For some reason I loved this line "a betrayal Shakespeare would be proud of" Great Job Akumi.
Kori (Chapter 1) - Sat 04 Oct 2008
| OooOhhh Lala, veeryyy kinkaayyy, mon cherie!!! :DDD Dark alley, scraping metal garbage cans, and a lusting demon, what else do you need? XDDD A very yummmyyy, experience for a first lemon.^~ More? Kaaayyy???
Possessed (Chapter 1) - Sat 04 Oct 2008
| Like chocolate... Dark, rich and sinfully delicious! Good job on this one!
Nobody (Chapter 1) - Fri 03 Oct 2008
| very nice akumi great job your suchan emotional writer.
Yuzuki (Chapter 1) - Fri 03 Oct 2008
| I love it sweets. Your first semi lemon was for me. I feel honored. I like how you can write and show their desire and lust for one another in a darker light. You were born to write sweets. Thank you again for this amazing fic.
| very good job, akumi. i liked it. ;D
| Your first and i loved it. I really could picture it and I think i need a drink my throats dry. wow never would have guessed that it was your first. lol
hugs and puppies
| I know I already sent this in the email, but it's dark and full of lust. I loved the ending.
twiknham (Chapter 1) - Thu 02 Oct 2008
| Very good Akumi! Great job.
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Thu 02 Oct 2008
| Interesting. While not really in my taste, it was very well done. I could envision what was happening as I read and felt the emotions. Not bad Aku-chan.
| Very nice. Dark and sinful.
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Thu 02 Oct 2008
| ohhh wow mi-chan this was awsome!!!! kinda dark but full to the brim with deep deep emotions. you would have a hard time telling that his was ur first lemon...the detail was amazing, i could see it in my head!!! you did really great!! *huggs and lots of luv darling*
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