this one would make a good chapter fic. :)
I liked this one very much.
well written.
Please continue this, it is great as it is but I find this story to be quite interesting. Emotionally traumatized characters can make great plots.
Wawa (Chapter 1) - Tue 23 Sep 2008
| I really liked your story! Excellent writing!
Yuzuki (Chapter 1) - Tue 23 Sep 2008
| I like your writing. It's different from the other's out there. I love this one shot. Amazing job.
Zyren (Chapter 1) - Tue 23 Sep 2008
| ok definately not as traumatizing as when she lost her arm in the last one. i did like it though, im finding an odd fascination with the fact that your work isnt all lovey dovey in any shape or fashion. it is brutal, but let's think about it, realistically thats how it would probably be so good job.
Akumi (Chapter 1) - Tue 23 Sep 2008
| I really liked this a lot actually. I don't think of your writing as dark as I'd like to. lol. This was more realistic, and has that hint of caring that dulls the burning sting the torture leaves behind. Very well done on the characters! They fit very well into their roles. I have to wonder about Jaken a little, but I just don't think very highly of him. lol. It was nice to see him actually playing a good worker and a nice demon. Great job! -Akumi
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