you should also make it in his P.O.V I would like to know what he was thinking when he did that to her
it was really good and then u have the switching of third and first person
but it was amazing and u should continue
tifany (Chapter 1) - Sat 13 Sep 2008
| hahhaha thanks for the reply, hehehe i knew i read the story somewhere hehehe thanks pls update soon thanks
| wow...interesting....you might want to change your summary a little bit though...it sounds like you went from third person *I think...the whole Sesshomaru and Kagome got married thing* to first person...(it all being in Kag's POV...with all the I's and whatnot)....please tell me she at some point kicked Fluffy in the crotch! btw, are they youkai, miko, hanyou etc??? or all humans?
| i like your story but it did get confusing cause like helikesitheymikey said you jumped from third person to first person, but dont get me wrong its not where you shouldnt contiue, because you should, maybe you should just read it over before you put it on here, or have one of your close friends read it, cause this is really really good...and kagome shoulda beat the hell out of sesshomaru and kagura when she caught them in his office...so please continue soon
tifany (Chapter 1) - Sat 06 Sep 2008
| hi can you tell have you post this story somewhere else its just seem familiar... thanks
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