Very cute idea. There were one or two sentences where the structure was a bit odd, but once you said english wasn't your native language, it made total sense. ^^ I adored the idea. Maybe an english native as a beta would help you feel more confident of your work, too. ^^
elley (Chapter 1) - Tue 22 Jul 2008
Aw! I can't believe this is only a oneshot. Although it did end nicely. Great idea with the white chocolate. I never thought about it even though I knew white chocolate was not really considered chocolate because there is no cocoa solids used to make it, only cocoa butter.
that was cute, very clever w/ the white chocolate
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