| I Love this story so much. It's so original, noone every really writes a detailed story like this about the time between the feudal era and when they actually meet Kagome again. I was worried as hell Sess was gunna die and never see her :( Her song flashback with Inu walking away almost made me cry!! I can't wait to read more!!
Too Tired and Old for Words (Chapter 2) - Fri 18 Jul 2008
| You need a good beta reader who will catch your spelling errors, some of which are distracting. I'm not saying this is bad story, but you've some problems. You've also got some historical facts dead wrong. The Japanese were NOT being interred at camps during Vietnam, that was World War II. Many of the Vietnamese living in the US did suffer a great deal of prejudice back then. Part of being a good writer is being able to use facts and information to make your story plausible.
mandy (Chapter 5) - Fri 18 Jul 2008
| Wow, I really like your story... So detailed and descriptive, have you or a family member been in the army? Great job, I can't wait to read more of this story. -I'm so going to cry if sesshomaru ended up dead because of the war he wanted to experiance.... Lovin it so far, and again... GREAT JOB!
tina (Chapter 5) - Fri 18 Jul 2008
| wow I havent heard miltary terms like that since I live on base as a child , but I would have to agree with Too Tired and Old for Words they didnt round anyone up during nam , but otherwise the story is AWESOME , and yes you need a spell checker but it isnt to hard to tell what you are trying to convey to the reader
tina (Chapter 5) - Fri 18 Jul 2008
| wow I havent heard miltary terms like that since I live on base as a child , but I would have to agree with Too Tired and Old for Words they didnt round anyone up during nam , but otherwise the story is AWESOME , and yes you need a spell checker but it isnt to hard to tell what you are trying to convey to the reader
tina (Chapter 5) - Fri 18 Jul 2008
| sorry for the double post stupid pc acted up
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