who is this story about???

i like this! it was sad but ended happy!

I didn't really understand this much, it needed more background info. As I've said in my other reviews, you write well but what you're writing about is not all the way clear and so at the end I find myself asking, "What was the point of that?". I also think you need to work on your foreshadowing technique. One things for sure, you've got mad talent and I look forward to seeing more of your works!

Awwh, this is so beautiful! I love it! I don't fully understand it, but I love it. I really like the way you write - it's a motivator for me. Makes me want to go out and write now. I'm glad I took the time to read this.

~ Incomprehensible

I liked it. Very cute. Good job!

Decent enough, but you've got much better.  I would have perfered more background or storyline, but it's a nice enough one-shot.