Awww, Shippo's uncertainty, and maturity in hiding his emotion is adorable and heart breaking, I am in love with your characterisation of him. He is so sweet, and somewhat lost looking, and you are reminded of how /young/ he is. ;__;
Adorable beginning, with perfect imagery, and your talented sugar-sweet characterisation. ;u; As your beta, I demand not only recognition, but that you maybe add that this is AU to the summary? To give readers a heads up. Your idea for this is so interesting, though, you need to write faster. seriously. ;u;!!