Dang, this is very sweet and exactly my kind of humour! The tone reminds me of the marvellous Tally Mark's work and I was smiling the whole way through. A Twilight cake... ugh.
Charming, fluffy and so sweet that its capable of creating tooth cavities- this story is perfect.
The dialoge between characters is very realistic...almost like you are in the room with them. Kagome is tart and sassy and Sesshomaru loses none of his edge as a murdering psychopath with a heart for Kagome. I reallly like the way you see him in your mind. You are a good writer with a strong afinity for the truth of you characters. To me, it would be harder to maintain a character already known than to start fresh but your characters feel fresh. I hope you are with us for a while but you are awfully good.
