This is a really interesting concept.  The title alone is pretty darn cool. (though wouldnt it be Ano, Sui, Dep?) When someone close dies, people start doing weird, possibly dangerous, things.  To quote buffy: "Love makes you do the crazy." I can tell kagome had a deep and special bond with her friend. 

I loved kagome's intro to sess; it was pretty kickass. 

There are a few transition problems (smoothing out the story) and the changes in POV are sort of distracting for me.  I do like the overall concept and await a new chapter.

ducky out.

Very interesting storyline. I had a bit of trouble following things, though. Keeping to one point of view might be easier. Was the boy with red/blue hair Alex? Also, adding more details to what's going on might help with some of the confusion. Good luck!

This story has a lot of potential, but there are some things about it that have me a little confused.  A couple of details seem to change as the story progresses.  For instance, is it Kagome's brother or her friend that died?  The first chapter seemed to suggest it was her friend, but the third stated it was her brother.  The changes in POV have caused a little confusion, too.  In the first chapter, there was a paragraph at the end that did not seem to be in either Kagome's POV or the red-haired teen's, but there was no indication of whose POV it was. 

Still, the story is interesting and I look forward to seeing where you go with it.

I have to say, the subject matter of this story, and how lightly it is taken, really disturb me. Serious research and perhaps a different tone may be needed here. It was a little uncomfortable to read. Technically, the other reviews are right about punctuation, capitalization, and point-of-view. I hope you take all the reviews to heart. You could have a great story, because this is definately original. Good luck.

I can see a marked improvement where you started using a beta.  I would like to suggest that you stick to third person POV.  It seems that you have less problems with it.  It seems to flow better and appears less rushed/forced when you are using it.  Also, you are tackling some very controverial/serious subject.  A little more research would probably help the story flow better.

you've come up with an interesting concept here, however it seems like your story would flow a bit better if you would limit the multiple punctuation marks, other than that it seems like your doing rather well, but be cautious about asking for your reviews, i noticed that you are very close to demanding them from your readers, and that isnt allowed on this site, so just be a little more careful in the future!!

Few words of advice to help improve this story.  When it comes to puncuation, less is more.  You only need one ! or ? per sentence and adding mutlibles only breaks the flow of the story.  Same thing with words in all caps, if you really want to emphaize a word put it in ' ' rather than all caps, as it still gives the same effect but doesn't interupt the flow.  And also posting that it's a chance of POV is going to disrupt the flow as well, when you change POV, just make sure you put some way for the reader to know that in the actual story instead of annoucing it in a AN.  I wish you much luck in your future writing.

Hairann