Wow, dark is right. That was very good and for it to be so few words very powerful. It was utterly captivating, not a thing a lot of people can pull off. Your writting was excellent. At first I thought it was a little choppy but after re-reading it looks like you did that for effect. Very good and kinda scary. I can't wait to see what the next music you listen to inspires.
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Mon 25 Oct 2010
This was very well done, and a unique way for the jewel to find its way back into Kagome. From a writers POV the way you approached the rape of Kagome was exceptionally well done, and very dark. Well done, I'll look forward to more of your work in the future!
Very good! Again like I said in my other review on your oneshot 'Seasons', I love you style of writing! I have a liking of darker fics and this one is dark, which makes me like it even more. I hope to see more from you in the future! Keep up the good work!
I'm not sure I understand the very end. What is Sesshomaru telling her she may do? What is she requesting? Perhaps that is explained in the story, but if you plan to post a one-shot drabble that is inspired by it, then I would suggest making such things very clear for the readers who haven't yet read your other works. It would just be helpful! :)
I thought you approached the sensitive subject of rape very poetically (NOT romantic... too often poetic and romance are used interchangeably, and that's not what I mean here) You weren't vulgar in the description of what was going on, but it was clear what was happening. I also appreciated the reality of the situation. It wasn't some romanticized even but rather to expressed the horror and evil of the act. Bravo!
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