i love this story! but i hope that you realise that the story is repeated again in the same chapter! Anyway, i really enjoyed it! please make another one for Sesshoumaru's birthday!
I think this story has a lot of potential, but at times it was hard to read due to the many errors and misspellings. Also, While i realize that Sesshoumaru had been watching and wanting her, that really does not explain why he would mate her, and why she would agree without question. Especially considering she had minutes before had her sights set on Inuyasha. This really seemed like a rebound turned mating without much reasoning and detail. One more thing, the story is posted twice here... I read through it, and thinking there was more, I started reading again only to realize it was the exact same story. I would suggest you have someone Beta for you... Thanks for writing and i hope my comments help you with future stories!
autumngold (Chapter 1) - Sat 17 Oct 2009
Nice story! I'm glad that Sesshoumaru was there to make Kagome's birthday special! Leave it to Inuyasha to not care enough about Kagome to even remember her birthday. Of course, if he wasn't such a jerk Kagome would have mated him, so I'm glad your story worked out the way it did! Hope you post again soon!
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