The story is sweet, romantic and funny. I hope that you will update soin
keep posting!
This was a great chapter and a grea story so please update soon!! :)
This was a really good chapter and i hope you update soon! THANKS!!
this is a really great story and i was wondering who is Rin's real mother. since sesshomaru is her dad she had to of had a mother at some point that is unless she was adopted. well please tell me in one of the later chapters. THANKS!
lol. great story line and plot but you need to work on your grammer and spelling a bit. but very enjoyable! got plenty of great laughs from it.
wow really interesting story, just one let down though u need to work on your english because some of the sentences didnt make any sense.r u going to make any more chapters, do kagome and sesshomaru get together in the end i really want to know.apart from that really good story.
This is really good fanfic. :) Keep up the good work.
Oh and I have a question...Why in are some quotes ended in Man? kinda like "...."Man but other than that I can't wait for you to update.
I love the story so far =] I'll be waiting for the next update!!
I did notice the english, i could beta for you if needed. I'm not working on anything at the moment.
This is my e-mail if you ever need me. amc2491@aol.com
just start to read your story today. I'm realy enjoy it, good job can't wait for the next chapter
I just wanted to leave a little note -- your story is wonderful. Very sweet and very funny. It does look like you have some grammar and spelling issues, that'd be my only criticism. You could fix this by getting yourself a beta reader. If you go on the forums, you can ask anyone on the site if they'd be willing to do the job. I know you're working on your English, so here's a site that'll help you with the grammar side of things: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/
The best thing about that site is it does have an English as a Second Language area.
Also, try: http://dictionary.reference.com/ It'll help with spelling and such. http://www.merriam-webster.com/ is also good. My personal favorite is: http://www.thefreedictionary.com/ It has some games and such that you can play that are pretty fun. (All of them have games, but the freedictionary's are the most fun, in my opinion.) The Spelling Bee and the Match Up game would be useful in broadening your vocabulary, plus it helps with spelling. Merriam Webster's site has a TON of games too. Anyway, have fun!
And if you have any questions, I wouldn't mind answering a few here and there. I don't have a lot of time, so I can't beta for you. But a grammar/spelling question or two now and then isn't any trouble. Message me here at Dokuga or give me an email at noacat@gmail.com.
You really need to reread your chapters before you post them. There are a lot of grammer errors and also you change from past tense to present. It is really annoying. The story line has potential but you need to get a beta or really look over your work. I can't read past this chapter because your words do not read smoothly. Again, your story line seems like it will be good but really work on your writing.
There are alot of typo's in this, everyone has em but there's alot here, otherwise its pretty good.
I'd just like to say I really like the way the plot of this story is going. It's very original.
Message me if you would like a beta.
nice chappy.
good worrk,post soon.
I like it next chapter please!!
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