I really like how this is written, the contrasting viewpoints between Kagome and Sesshomaru, and the eventual meeting with thier promises of love. It's endearing and very sweet. Good job!
It was well written, a couple spelling errors here and there but the love was clear. I would have liked to see exactly how they ended up together in the first place...it would explain a lot more than just fractual memories of her touching him and them kissing. As a drabble, it's great but it feels like it's missing the core of the devotion...I look forward to more.
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Mon 29 Mar 2010
I really enjoyed reading this. It was easy to see the deep feelings they had for one another. You described everything very well, and other than a few spelling mistakes it was very well written, I'll look foreward to more of your work in the future:D
Short and sweet, but I think more could be done with this. I'm not sure whether this is meant to be a drabble or a snapshot, if it is then, it stands alone fine. Although I'm very curious about the details of their relationship and how this all came about. I think there is a much deeper and interesting story waiting to be told here. A few misspelled words and such. I hope you will decide to devlop this further. Nice work.
This is a nice little story. I always like cute little stories. There are some spelling and grammatical errors, so I would suggest using a beta and spellcheck. You could try fleshing this out a little more. There is no hurry, try not to rush. You have a nice way with words. I loved his line in there. Le sigh.
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Sat 27 Mar 2010
Short, but very cute. Great job with details, everything was easy to imagine. Though I was a bit confused with the line '"With every kiss I give you, I will add another."' did you mean adding another kiss? If so then I guess I'm not as confused as I thought hehe. Keep up the good work and I hope to read more from you in the future.
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