Ok, now my curiousity is really peaked. This was good. I'm sorry it took a few days to get back to this but my laptop decided to go haywire, yet again. I'm borrowing my husband's tonight so I can get caught up on my fics. I like the suspence this scene has in it. I can't wait to read more more. JEN
very good!! An excellent chapter 3, you really tied a lot together from the previous chapter and I'm looking forward to the "playing dirty" and sesh getting his revenge! Til next time :)
Don't worry about going too fast or anything, just work at your own pace. It's your story you know! Man, this thing is really mysterious too. I really want to find out what happened to Kagome to make her lose her memory.
Moon Mage Goddess (Chapter 2) - Tue 04 Aug 2009
OMG NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!
You just ended the chapter there, like that? He kissed her lips, and END?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!! OMG, I need to read more!
This story is sweet, passionate, romantic, unique - wonderful all around! Please update soon!
~Sandreline
love it love it. Its not going to fast. You definetly have tons more to write about! I'm excited for the next update
Ok, honestly now, are you sure you've never written a fic before? This is actually very good. I spotted just a few typos and aside from that this is a great beginning. As far as going to fast...personally I find it ok. The kiss from Sesshoumaru? That's up to you. You just need to keep the same tempo and interest level up as these first two chapters and I think you'll do fine. I'm not a writer but I do know if you want consructive critisium most who review just don't beyond, "oooh I like it" or "plz update soon". I notice alot of fluff in reviews,like most overlook any and all mistakes if they like the plot. So, if you really need help I'd post on the board so the real writers will come out to help and give you pointers. These girls are great here for responding to a help. I adore Dokugans. Oh and if you don't get actual reviews? Don't take it to heart. Alot of people read and for whatever reason don't review but that doesn't mean you aren't good. Hope I've been helpful and good luck. I'll be looking for more of your work. JEN
I LOVE this! Please continue!
ami (Chapter 1) - Mon 03 Aug 2009
PPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEE keep the story its is such a good story line.and the awkward and intense physical attraction is mesmorizing.
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