I like the story. It's very good.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE.

Unfortunately, I was not able to get any further than the first chapter. You have run-on sentences gallore in addition to all of the many grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors. I would suggest getting a beta to look over your story and doing an intense review of proper grammar, punctuation, and sentence/paragraph structure. Good luck with your writing!

lol. this is a really cute story. hope you continue.

this was really out of character but horribly adoriable i felt, generally i look passed gramar issues n stuff so i thought your plot and story were very cute and i cant wait tos ee whathapens.

so far i love this!

Alloh.

So, I couldn't really read past the first chapter, but I'm going to see if I can help at all.

The first thing I noticed when I was reading, was that you have a lot of run-on sentences. Try to cut them down a little. Take off the unnecessary words and parts, add names, commas, periods, semi-colons, whatever necessary, but try not to let them run away with you, because the reader will be sitting there like: "Geeze! Does this sentence ever end? Somebody call the Guinness Book of World Record company!"

Another thing I noticed was that you use a lot of unnecessary words. I think you might be able to clean up the story a bit if you take them out. For example, you use the word 'him' and 'her' a lot. Some of the times you can just omit them altogether.

After that, I think punctuation might be a problem - but everyone has that. I'm not going to point out too many things at this point, because frankly, I think people can only work on one thing at a time, or many small things, and then go on to another. Otherwise it's just overwhelming build-up. Not fun.

My only suggestion is perhaps consider getting a beta? Someone good with words, a grammar Nazi and maybe someone you can talk to who will help you develop ideas and characters to the best of your ability. I'm not saying that you're not good on your own, but it always helps to have an outside opinion, yeah?

Anyways, thanks for the read.

Was only able to read the first chapter of this story, just too many mistakes to make it easy to read.  Couple of pointers: watch your run on sentences.  Use commas or even start a fresh sentence if need be. 

Example: Climbing out of the well Kagome looked around at the feudal era and sighed she was done with looking for the jewel shards and the jewel was placed in her body and Inuyasha decided to stay a hanyou, Kohaku, sango, and Miroku were at the old demon slayer village rebuilding the old village and gathering people who wish to be a Taijia.

Try: Climbing out of the well, Kagome looked around at the feudal era and sighed.  She was done with looking for the jewel shards.  Since Inuyasha had decided to stay a hanyou and had no need for it, the jewel was replaced within her body.  Kohaku, Sango and Miroku were rebuilding the old demon slayer village and gathering people who wished to be a Taijia.

Most of the chapter reads like a list rather than a story.  

Example: The two got on Kilala's back and went to the demon slayer village, the village had at least twenty people living there with sango and Miroku the head of the village and her the 'great Shikon warrior.' she tried telling them they did not need to call such things but they still did. Kagome had chosen to live here in the head shrine with her friends and son. And she even got training from sango and Midoriko in her sleep. She had learned a lot and learned how to use a sword and her bow and arrow. Sango got her a bow made of demon bones so it wouldn't break easily.

Try: Getting on Kilala's back, they began heading toward the slayer's village.  It had grown to at least twenty people living there and Miroku had become the village head.  Though she had told them not to, they referred to her as the 'great Shikon warrior' after she had decided to live there with her son.  Between Sango and Midoriko, in her dreams, she had been trained further in bows as well as with a sword.  And as with all demon slayers, she was given a bow made from demon bones.

They're not perfect, but easier to read and better flow.

Not sure if you noticed, but you keep spelling Sango as sango, even though you capitalize the others' names. 

And watch for words that are spelled correctly, but not the ones you are looking for. 

Example: "Kagome your home I am glade . How was you trip home?"

You want glad .

Example: He came up after looking at her bear chest, without a second her pressed his lips to hers.

You want bare .

Hope these tips help and good luck with your future writing.