Like it so far, but the story moved very fast in places, and, since I'm not really up on as much Japanese mythology as I'd like, I got lost a few times. You might want to go into a bit more background when you name characters.
I really enjoy the way that you type. And how in most parts the words flow smoothly. I see some errors probably due to, typing to fast. <br>
The story seems to be off to a great start, and I would love to see the spectacular finish, that I think this story can make. <br>
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-FangedBeasty
Calix (Chapter 1) - Sun 28 Dec 2008
Nice start. Flows well with the mythology. I had to take out my reference books for some of the gods. I'm looking forward to seeing how this story continues.
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