Glad I found your newly uploaded stories. I've read from you before and have enjoyed it. I do feel some parts of the story is missing. For example, I didn't know Kagome knew Rin was Sesshomaru's adopted daughter. The reader found that out through a memory but no indication that Sesshomaru has mentioned it.
Also, the things Kagome refuses to ask like "what kind of Youkai are you?" Seems so off since she's going to have a kid with this guy.
The mood of some of the conversations seem weird. Like when Kagome and Sesshomaru were getting upset with each other at the cafe, nothing that was being said gave an indication that any of them should have been angry, so it didn't feel like it flowed.
I very much enjoyed the story and will love to continue reading. Thank you so much
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