Some punctuation errors and run-ons. Otherwise, I like it.

This story has a lot of potential to be an interesting romantic comedy, but it seems a bit rushed to me, and that's not just because Sesshoumaru seems to be falling in love with Kagome only two chapters into the story.  You should try to slow down and work in more details about the characters' emotions and such. For example, in the first chapter when Sesshoumaru caught Kikyou and Inuyasha together, his reaction gave me the impression that that was something he was used to seeing Kikyou messing around with someone and that he was not all that bothered by it.  But then you revealed that Sesshoumaru had planned to propose to Kikyou.  Also, I kind of expected Kagome to put up a little more of a fight when some strange demon abducts her.  Sure, she shows some concern and tries to tell his parents that he's crazy, but for the most part, it's as if this is a normal thing for her.  If you try to work on your description a little more, I think this could be a very good story.

Your story is interesting but not very plausible. The characters seem very ooc. You give lots of details about clothing but give no backstory to the characters. I think with more details and grammar fixes your story would better. Maybe getting a beta would help.

I like the story idea..had to look up Holiday in Handcuffs though..wasn't sure if it was a fanfic or a movie. It's something that you should have mentioned in the disclaimer though.

The 1st chapter seemed a little rushed and there is some work that needs to be done with your grammar & sentence structure - probably another pair of eyes. There's no backstory to any of the characters aside from their initial intro to the story - that's something that would be helpful to explore. Kagome's attire seems very out of sorts especially if she's getting it from Sess's mom & Rin (who I am guessing is at least a teenager and obviously a full Inuyoukai). Is InuYasha still a hanyou?

The second chapter had some fun interactions but still no explanations for why Sess randomly chose Kagome and why his bestial side figures she's worthy of being his mate. The POV switching made it very hard to read...writing it in third person would make it a much smoother read.

The story has potential...keep at it!!

I thought there was an interesting idea here, and you do have parts of lovely descriptive work (mostly on clothing), but there are a few areas that you should work on. First, punctuation and grammar and important and you should definately get a beta to help you out. Errors can cause most readers to get out of the story and back into the real world, which is never what you want. Second, you really should go into more detail when it comes to the history between certain characters and situations. I think it would really help you. Third, you really should let us know what Holidays in Handcuffs really is. Fanfic of yours? Someone else's fanfic? Book? Movie? That would really help out. With a little work, you could make this story really great.

ducky here!! I just want to say that your fic is a cute thing to read.  I think it would be a great idea if you took your time to zoom in on spelling/grammar mistakes.  As a rule, an author should avoid author notes or explanations not part of the story in the text of the fic.  Description should be enough.  Instead of putting in parentheses (they’re basically armwarmers), write that they’re armwarmers. 

I find it cute and funny that Kagome’s wardrobe is basically like a hottopic store. 

Okay: Sesshoumaru seems to be a bit bipolar.  He’s mad that Kikyo is having relations with Inuyasha yet he smirks at her and says, “you’re not worthy…etc.”  I thought it was hilarious when he just dragged Kagome into his car and said (defacto) “you’re my gf.  there will be no opposition.”  I think the fast pace works for your fic.  For most fics, I would advise slowing the plot down, but the beginning was perfect in this case.  Now that Kagome and Sesshoumaru are in lockdown, you should take things step by step. 

Kagome and Sesshoumaru’s behavior perplexes me at times – I’m not gonna lie.  However, we all do crazy stuff when we’re in crazy situations, so I’m pretty content with the characterization.  Best of luck and keep writing!!

ducky out!

I looked up Holiday In Handcuffs, and found that it was a movie.  You might want to put that in your summary and authors notes that you are basing your story off the movie.  That way everyone knows it's not from another fan fiction written by someone else.  I never saw the movie but the idea is pretty funny.  

What you've written so far is very amusing, and your descriptions of clothing and such are excellent.  However your story seems a bit rushed to me.  Draw it out a little more.  Also switching back and forth between points of view interrupts the rhythm of the the story.  Switching to third person point of view could help.  You could express what both characters are thinking and feeling more smoothly.  There are also some grammar and spelling mistakes throughout but that happens to everyone and a beta could help with that.

You have a viable story, that with a little bit of editing is well worth finishing.  I hope you will.

This has the potential to be an awsome story, however the constant changing of POV is very confusing sticking solely to 3rd person would help this story emmensly.  the story also seems to be extremely rushed, there is little background to explain why the characters are acting the way they are and what all the circumstances leading to Sesshoumaru kidnapping Kagome are. You describe the clothing and their appearances extremely well, but that is only a small part of any story. Spend a little more time developing the plot and this has great potential.

Before I start my review, I am a bit confused on something.  You said that this is a 'Remake of 'Holidays in Handcuffs' ' but you do not state if that story is yours or someone else's.  If it is someone else's, you need to make sure you have their permission to use the idea and if you do, post it in the AN so your readers will know.  If the story is yours, make sure you say that as well.

The story itself, though it does need a bit of work, is a pretty decent start.  I would recommend writing it completely in third person, as the many changes in POV are a bit distracting.  Try to slow down, as the story is sounding rather rushed.  You could use some more background on the characters, such as how Kikyou and Sesshoumaru got together, more about Kagome's life pre-Sesshoumaru.

For puncuation, be very careful as I've noticed you tend to put the commas after the quotations (",) when it should always be the other way around (,").  A few misspellings, such as 'minuet' which is spelled minute.  Stay away from adding things like '(I think I just made a word lol)' in the middle of the story, it is considered an AN and is in fact against the rules in Dokuga to have them throughout the story. 

You do a great job on discribing the clothes they are wearing, but it almost seems like you don't try to discribe anything else.  Adding in more details to each paragraph could do wonders for this story, helping it reach its potental.  Would love to see where you take this story as with a bit of work, it could be a really decent read.