My I am sooooooo excited for the next chapter!!! Much better then the other chick who ripped you off. Can't wait love the story, all this kagomaru fluffiness and other fics make me wanna write my own! When I have finished it please review mine!! I will have to get working on it ASAP lol!
Hello I just wanted to inform you that either
a: some one MAJORLY ripped off your story
b: you MAJORLY ripped off someone's story
if you search kagomexsesshomaru rape fanfic I can't remember specifically which one it is but its a story of kagome and she gets raped and ends up shutting the well for 1 year while her twins grow. also the fact that in This other possibly stolen fic it takes word for word some of your paragraphs. I just thought you should know. ok?
Plesae update and soon..
alloverthisfic (Chapter 9) - Sun 18 Sep 2011
You’re doing quite well so far, yet perhaps the best form of flattery is imitation. There's another author over at fanfiction .net called 'flaming witch of fire' who has plagiarized your work. The story isn't word-for-word, but it’s quite obvious that it was written with your fiction as a template (unless your secret alternate pen name happens to be 'flaming witch of fire', if so please excuse me). If your still awake after all these years then please file a claim over at fanfiction .net. Otherwise your fiction is good, though I would suggest a beta reader for some spelling errors and minor inconsistencies. This is a nice read so far :
Fangurl Ayane (Chapter 3) - Fri 01 Jul 2011
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There were quite a few annoyingly repetitive spelling errors and word mix-ups in every chapter. Along with coarse for course, and your inability or oversight of the difference between except and accept, Taijia was a big mispelling for me. I just have a pet peeve of misspelled words when using another language. However, beyond the annoyance of the spelling errors, your story's plot and development is quite enjoyable and for the most part well developed. While relationship between Sesshoumaru and Kagome is moving slightly fast, it is not completely unrealisticly fast. I enjoy the character of Akio and Sesshoumaru is quite well developed as well. Overall, I believe it is a great beginning to what could turn out to be a very good story. I would like to read more. I hope my comments do not deter you. I await the next chapter
--Kaminoko (c)2011
| @_@ *wonders how much she has to pounce you to get update*
Lauren (Chapter 9) - Wed 10 Dec 2008
| Im loving it! update soon
| I really likr the story plot and it is different than other rape stories....overall i really want you to update!
sunset in love (Chapter 9) - Mon 24 Nov 2008
| gosh.... wellllll i'll tell you how what i think as soon i got to read another chapter, and another, and another... it's obviously good and really can't wait what!!!!
black moon inu (Chapter 9) - Sun 23 Nov 2008
| more MOre MORE im becomeing addicted i love this story and as mean as this may sound don't take it the wrong way im glad i didn't read it till now because i got to read so many chappys yeah for me. LOL sorry but i hate it when i read a summary and either can't stop myself from reading or don't notice that thiers only one or two chapters. it kills me to wait. I love akio soo cute and i can't wait to see what you pull out for us next. post soon.
hugs and puppies
I will be honest with you. You need a beta. This would be more palatable without the grammatical and spelling mistakes. Your writing is not bad, some parts are good even, but it would need more details about the emotions of the characters (but, well, that's probably because I love it when we have more insight in their minds.)
Sesshomaru and Kagome are slightly OOC, and the plot is... unoriginal. The Beast-taking-control-and-raping-Kagome is a classic amongst the Sess/Kag fandom, but, well, you can use such a story to hone your skills. By the way, I think I would be traumatised if it happened to me... Kagome is a strong lass, but her reactions are somehow a little unbelievable.
Again, this is not a flame. Please, take this review as my way of helping you improving your writing. Not that mine is perfect, far from it, but well... I know why I have a beta lol.
Dewa mata
Jessica (Chapter 2) - Sat 22 Nov 2008
Not a bad idea for a story but I think you need a beta to polish it up some for you.
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