Not a bad start. Interesting plot, so far. I only noticed a few minor spelling issues. You also had some puncutuation problems that messed with the flow a bit.  Perhaps, getting a beta might help if your going to continue . Which I think you should. I would like to see where you take this.

Aww darling, don’t say you want flames.  They really are unpleasant, and it makes people think other writers are as fire-proof as you are.  ^__^ This chapter is like a diamond in the rough: beautiful but in need of cutting and polishing.  The skeleton of the story is great (plot, characterization, setting, premise..etc.); however, you need to work on spelling and grammar.  This fic has the potential to be way too good for it to go to waste.  Get. a. Beta.  I would volunteer if I wasn’t already betaing a fic.  Having a beta is great for bouncing off ideas and catching your mistakes. 

Couple of questions: are Inuyasha/sessh..etc demons in the modern era?  Who dragged Kagome in? Mistress Centipede? 

Okay – You’re story is so cool because it’s like the anime but not! (I’m tired and I’m not great at explaining things rite now.)

Maybe you should make a new thread on the forums so that you can get a beta! I am so excited to see this fic succeed. 

ducky out!

A very interesting start.  I really want to see what will happen next, as far as this plot to curse Sesshoumaru goes.  Also, I liked how you did not villainize Kikyou (at least not yet; I don't know what you have planned).  While I have nothing against the authors or stories that do so, I prefer to see her in a better light.  I wonder if she and Inuyasha will be more involved in the story, or if they are just going to be like Kagome's other futuristic friends, who know nothing about her time traveling.  Anyways, this is a good start and aside from a few spelling errors, it was well written.

for your first fic it isnt bad, i did notice that you had some repetitiveness when you described Kikyo, and there were some grammar mistakes that made some parts a little hard to follow but that is nothing a little editing wont fix:D, i will be faving this to see what you come up with next:D

This is a very original idea and interesting too.  There are some spelling and grammar issues, as well as a couple of sentences were left unfinished.  All these though can be easily corrected.  A little more background would be nice but that could be revealed in subsequent chapters. 

One thing bothered me a little in this chapter is the section where Kagome is comparing herself negatively to Kikyo.  But the way she lists her physical attributes it makes it sound like she is actually quite happy with her looks. That seemed inconsistent.  It would have gelled better to me if it were presented as she saw herself as ordinary but then you let us know with your description of her that it is far from the truth by letting us know what she sees vs. what the world sees.

Overall you did a good job and should consider continuing it. 

This is very interesting. Usually canon and alternate stories don't get mixed up, so I am interested to see where this will go. There were a few small spelling and grammatical errors, but nothing major. This is a great start to a great first fanfic, so I will be watching for new chapters. Welcome to the wonderful world for being a fanfic author! Kudos!

Well that's certainly a twist - she's taller, shaplier and Inu & Kikyou are on the 20thC side of the well, while Sess is in the 16th C. It is an interesting storyline. There were some sentence structure and grammar issues i.e different tenses used in the same sentence:

Kagome had gone ecstatic and run through the garden smelling each rose. - should be became and ran

Try not to rush through the events, watch out for too short sentences and even if it takes an extra paragraph to do it justice, explain as much as you can - back story in AU tales are of the utmost importance.

Look forward to reading more.

An interesting idea of getting Kagome through the well in an AU story, it needs a bit of work, mostly grammer issues, some of the sentence structions don't quite flow correctly, and a bit rushed.  Try slowing down a bit, add more details and perhaps more story before she goes through the well and I think you will have a nice story going.  Much luck :).