I like your first 2 chapters. I like the ideal of her stealing looks at Sesshoumaru and vice versa. I hope you have Kaede teach her to heal good enough to give him his arm back. I so dislike him having only one arm. I hate that part in the anime. I am so overjoyed that you did not put her in that stupid uniform. I also like the idea of the two brothers 'cooperating' with each other enough for Inuyasha to let Sesshoumaru to train him.
Lady Scheherazadea (Chapter 2) - Tue 28 Oct 2008
Very interesting start, I'm looking forward to reading more. One critique, you sometimes you use "there" when you should use "their".
Fortunesque (Chapter 1) - Mon 27 Oct 2008
This plot has been used quite a bit, but you've breathed some well needed freshness into it. Thank you for doing that.
By the way, 20 is SOOO not old farty. I'm 20. :P
I like this story. Sounds interesting. Loved Sesshomaru's line "Do not mistake my words for caring, wench." You hit his character right there. ;D The whole "i thought I smelled her rotten corpse" was a bit much. Personally, I would've put something just as mean only more aristocratic "I thought I smelled the stench of death and decay". But, it's your story! ;D
lol, very well done on the training. loved the whole "my ward" part. i was cracking up at that.
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