Hello, 
  
I'm glad I could help ;) This is a really nice chapter and I'm glad to see that it is longer than the previous two! 
  
But there is one thing I didn't get: do Inu and Yasha somehow know they have once been one? What exactly is their relationship? 
  
I hope the gang will not find a solution soon, insted it would be nice  if you would continue to focus on the two children: who of them will develop faster, who is more clingy, who will feel the need to protect the other, or will they be rivals? ... stuff like that ...  
  
I hope there will also be a lot of fighting for Kagomes attention ;) 
  
I really see forward to your next chapter! 
      
VS (Chapter 1) - Wed 28 Mar 2018 
I forgot to mention before: as far as I remember Puritysan was volunteering for being a Beta not so long ago...try to message her. There is also a section for authors who need a Beta, or volunteer to be one, in the Doguka Forum. 
Good luck! 
      
VS (Chapter 2) - Wed 28 Mar 2018 
Hello, 
  
first of all congratulations!!! It's absolute refreshing to read about a completely new idea! I have to say that I don't remember reading about a similar plot! Therefore I would like this story to not be abandoned, like so many others... 
  
Honestly I find your writing style good, you do not need to hesitate and be afraid of what we would think, just keep going on ;) 
  
The only suggestion I have: try to stay in the past forms, you switch between present and past forms...  
  
I look forward to your next update! 
      
Nicole (Chapter 2) - Fri 23 Mar 2018 
Nice please update soon 
      
I knew this would be a good story. I hope you find a beta reader. Your chapters have been good and clearly express what you want your readers to know. I'm looking forward to your next chapter. 
  
Update soon onegai 
  
Ja ne 
      
Aw! I just adore these kinds of stories where he's changed to a cute little boy.  I'm curious to see how the little human inuyasha is going to act. 
      
This sounds like it's going to be an awesome story! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us!  
      
Natalia (Chapter 1) -  Sun 18 Mar 2018 
Interesting idea never read it before! will be waiting for more 
good luck! 
      
Good first chapter Good luck I will be looking for the next chap please update soon. 
      
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