It's such a beautiful and heart breaking  story... I cried in every chapter from the begining to the end.

I hope you continue writing this one. Great work!

Very good start with the first chapter. Nicely written with very descriptive words. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues. I have never seen Moulin Rouge so I can't compare them. I will definitely be reading the rest of the story. Keep up the great work!

A beautifully written and heart rending tale.  You should finish it if your muse cooperates.  Your writing is excellent and a joy to read.  

this is a wonderful story, with hardly a spelling error to be seen and a wonderful plot to back all of this goodness up...a wonderful job to be sure, one i hope you continue in the near future...ill be faving it for sure!!

Wow.  Um, that was pretty angsty!! (I love angst, btw) My favorite part in this fic was Kagome waiting for Sesshoumaru for 100 years.  My heart was breaking as the years went by and as Sesshoumaru rejected her so many times.  I honestly feel that this fic would have been so much better if you took your time with it and fleshed out the chapters.  It felt really rushed in the beginning – something that detracts from the poignance of Kagome’s suffering after death and Sesshoumaru’s immediate pain of losing Kagome to death and rejection.

Anyway, way in the beginning of the story, Kagome is having some *ahem* naughty fantasies about Sesshoumaru.  Well that’s all good and fine, but steady attraction needed to have built up.  It just seemed unrealistic that she would fantasize about Sesshoumaru being her…master… after knowing him intimately for only a short amount of time.  Also, she came to the realization that she loved him pretty quick!  Again, I come to the conclusion that the fic was too rushed.

There were so many great opportunities to write about the futility of a relationship between the two even in the midst of heightened sexual tension.  Kagome is at an age when her sensuality is blossoming.  Sesshoumaru, a mature and very male demon, is captured by the juxtaposition of innocence and seduction coming from a human girl.  Confusion, desire, and sadness should have been present when describing their relationship because of the nature of Kagome’s illness. 

Now I’m going to revisit one of my favorite scenes from your fic again: Kagome waiting.  I really believe it shows Kagome at her strongest.  She has her faults, but there is no doubt that she is one stubborn girl.  Her love for Sesshoumaru, coupled with her regret, plus her stubbornness make for one hell of a combo.  I loved the way you told it in two parts: Kagome’s story and Sesshoumaru’s story.  It showed that both parties suffered for their misconceptions.  Kagome was suffering because of her foolishness regarding Sesshoumaru’s love life, and Sesshoumaru suffered for his inaction.  It tells a very complete tale of how one’s actions really do speak louder than words. 

There are some problems with grammar…blah blah blah.  But honestly, you’re good.  It’s always better to get a beta so that you can catch that one spelling mistake on chapter x, paragraph y, but trust me, you’re excellent compared to the horrors I’ve seen. 

I truly enjoyed reading.  Thank you for writing this.  I hope you write more stories and continue!  But slow down next time!! ^__^

ducky out!

I like this story so far and am curious to see what happens next.  I was a little confused about what happened while Kagome was supposedly dead -- who was speaking to her?  Are we going to get more of an explanation about that later?  And is Naraku really dead, or is it just another one of his tricks?  I hope you update soon.

This is a very sad story, and does indeed follow 'Moulin Rouge' without being an outright copy. I do like how in certain parts you have someone quoting the movie, which you marked well. I cannot wait to read more of this. I hope something happens so that Kags will live! Arg, the angst. Good job!

There are a few spelling and word usage errors, but nothing too bad. Great work!

I cried so much that I had to take a break in between her breaking his heart and her rebirth. You tell the tale of pain and anguish and sorrow and love so well. Honestly you don't need any lil sub a/n's in between - your detailed descriptions paint quite a clear picture. I really do hope you finish this tale with an ending befitting all the struggles they have already gone through

You do an amazing job with the details, everything is very easy to imagine and follow along with.  A bit OOC in some parts, but what I read so far is pretty decent none the less.  I would watch out for posting an AN in the middle of a chapter, such as (A/N: No, that last question was a follow up, not the second question.) as it is against the rules on Dokuga.  I don't know if they count just one as a problem, but either way it does break up the flow of your story.  And is really not needed as I doubt anyone would count that as his second question.  Keep up the good work.